LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Share Posted May 3, 2011 It's called "Get Outta My Head", it's completely left field for me, musically. Needs some major work, but check it out Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 oops . . . lol, here it it: Lyrics: [Verse 1] I-I-I'm a loser, I'm a fool, I broke the golden rule Let you get up under my skin, time and time again You played me, you hurt me, you made me feel unworthy Never loved me from the start, you stabbed me in the heart Faded memories Fake reality Invisible dreams What's inside of me I just couldn't see Now it's clear to me Prevent insanity Gotta let you be [Chorus x2] GET OUTTA MY HEAD Get outta, get outta, get outta here GET OUTTA MY HEAD Don't want'cha, don't want'cha, don't want'cha near GET OUTTA MY HEAD You killed me, you slayed me, you stabbed my heart GET OUTTA MY HEAD (GET OUTTA MY HEAD) GET OUTTA MY HEAD (GET OUTTA MY HEAD) GET OUTTA MY HEAD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aed05 Posted May 3, 2011 Share Posted May 3, 2011 That was actually kinda good. Its not polished, but with a good producer and some studio time, I could hear this on the radio. I think you have potential, but you might have to leave Seattle. I wish you success. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 That was actually kinda good. Its not polished, but with a good producer and some studio time, I could hear this on the radio. I think you have potential, but you might have to leave Seattle. I wish you success. Hey, thanks aed I appreciate your feedback. Yes, this was just a quick little home recording of what popped into my head upon listening to the beat. You're right, definitely needs major polishing and some re-recording in a legit studio. Thanks for the well wishes By the way, it's worse -- I'm in Spokane, not Seattle . . . so I DEFINITELY need to move elsewhere to pursue a career in music Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aed05 Posted May 3, 2011 Share Posted May 3, 2011 Hey, thanks aed I appreciate your feedback. Yes, this was just a quick little home recording of what popped into my head upon listening to the beat. You're right, definitely needs major polishing and some re-recording in a legit studio. Thanks for the well wishes By the way, it's worse -- I'm in Spokane, not Seattle . . . so I DEFINITELY need to move elsewhere to pursue a career in music Even worse. No, I kid. But all jokes aside, I think you need to move to a city with club culture. Seattle actually has good DJ's, who have come down to the bay and turned it out. So maybe they have some dope connections up there. But your sound is giving me LA, SF, NY or Miami. But keep up the good work wherever you are. If this is what you came up with without studio time, imagine what you'll do when everything falls into place. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 Even worse. No, I kid. But all jokes aside, I think you need to move to a city with club culture. Seattle actually has good DJ's, who have come down to the bay and turned it out. So maybe they have some dope connections up there. But your sound is giving me LA, SF, NY or Miami. But keep up the good work wherever you are. If this is what you came up with without studio time, imagine what you'll do when everything falls into place. As far as music and night life is concerned, it is I completely agree with you. I was actually just in Seattle from the 18th of April til the 23rd. There definitely is a club culture there, completely puts Spokorny to shame 90% of my relatives live over on the east coast, New Jersey. So it has always been in my mind to move in the NY area. And I've always considered LA/Cali as an option. I'm getting to that age I consider the make or break time for me, and slowly but surely I'm going to start making moves. Again, I want to thank you for your kind words of encouragement, taking time out to offer advice and check out the track. I really appreciate it more than you know Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 I'm going to try and finish the full rough draft today, then post some of the other songs I'm working on afterwards. I'm getting more and more focused on a full album of original material. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XYZ Posted May 3, 2011 Share Posted May 3, 2011 I like it But I think the vocals in the verse are too deep (for the music it's played against) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 I like it But I think the vocals in the verse are too deep (for the music it's played against) I can kind of see what you're saying -- during the "faded memories, fake reality..." half of the 1st verse. So you think I should re-record that part an octave higher to see if it flows a bit better with the instrumental? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XYZ Posted May 3, 2011 Share Posted May 3, 2011 yeh boo i think it bit too deep plus, i think it sounds a bit forced if it was a bit higher, wouldnt sound as forced.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LyricalLesson Posted May 3, 2011 Author Share Posted May 3, 2011 yeh boo i think it bit too deep plus, i think it sounds a bit forced if it was a bit higher, wouldnt sound as forced.. Good ear . . . it actually is 'forced' . . . I had to record it twice (layer) for emphasis and use a vocal effect on it because certain parts were getting lost behind the beat. I didn't initially think of recording it higher because I wanted a mellow build up to the hyped chorus, but I think you're right, it may sound better a bit higher. Thanks for the input, man! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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